[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 01/10] Rewrite Sysadmin

[Aaron Lauterer]

Polished phrasing.

Signed-off-by: Aaron Lauterer <a.lauterer at proxmox.com>
---
 sysadmin.adoc | 49 +++++++++++++++++++++++--------------------------
 1 file changed, 23 insertions(+), 26 deletions(-)

diff --git a/sysadmin.adoc b/sysadmin.adoc
index 21537f1..ef184ae 100644
--- a/sysadmin.adoc
+++ b/sysadmin.adoc
@@ -5,31 +5,28 @@ ifndef::manvolnum[]
 :pve-toplevel:
 endif::manvolnum[]
 
-{pve} is based on the famous https://www.debian.org/[Debian] Linux
-distribution. That means that you have access to the whole world of
-Debian packages, and the base system is well documented. The
-https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[Debian
-Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online, and provides a
-comprehensive introduction to the Debian operating system (see
-xref:Hertzog13[]).
-
-A standard {pve} installation uses the default repositories from
-Debian, so you get bug fixes and security updates through that
-channel. In addition, we provide our own package repository to roll
-out all {pve} related packages. This includes updates to some
-Debian packages when necessary.
-
-We also deliver a specially optimized Linux kernel, where we enable all
-required virtualization and container features. That kernel includes
-drivers for http://zfsonlinux.org/[ZFS], and several hardware drivers.
-For example, we ship Intel network card drivers to support their
-newest hardware.
-
-The following sections will concentrate on virtualization related
-topics. They either explain things which are different on {pve}, or
-tasks which are commonly used on {pve}. For other topics, please refer
-to the standard Debian documentation.
-
+{pve} ist based on https://www.debian.org/[Debian] Linux. The base
+system is well documented. The
+https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[
+Debian Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online and provides
+a comprehensive introduction to the Debian operation system
+(see xref:Hertzog13[]).
+
+A standard {pve} installation uses the default Debian repositories.
+This means that the whole world of Debian packages is available.
+Security updates and bug fixes are obtained through this channel as
+well. In addition Proxmox provides it's own package repository.
+The Proxmox repository contains the {pve} packages as well as updates
+for Debian packages if necessary.
+
+{pve} comes with its own Linux kernel. It has all the required
+virtualization and container features enabled.
+https://zfsonlinux.org/[ZFS] and several hardware drivers, for example
+to support the latest Intel network cards, are included.
+
+The following sections will focus on {pve} specifics regarding the
+administration and management of the host machine. For other topics
+please refer to the Debian documentation.
 
 ifdef::wiki[]
 
@@ -38,7 +35,7 @@ See Also
 
 * link:/wiki/Package_Repositories[Package Repositories]
 
-* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration] 
+* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration]
 
 * link:/wiki/System_Software_Updates[System Software Updates]
 
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