[pve-devel] [PATCH docs 7/9] Rewrite Sysadmin

[Oguz Bektas]

hi,

On Tue, Sep 10, 2019 at 11:22:04AM +0200, Aaron Lauterer wrote:
> Polished phrasing
> 
> Signed-off-by: Aaron Lauterer <a.lauterer at proxmox.com>
> ---
>  sysadmin.adoc | 40 +++++++++++++++-------------------------
>  1 file changed, 15 insertions(+), 25 deletions(-)
> 
> diff --git a/sysadmin.adoc b/sysadmin.adoc
> index e045610..9592c4a 100644
> --- a/sysadmin.adoc
> +++ b/sysadmin.adoc
> @@ -5,31 +5,21 @@ ifndef::manvolnum[]
>  :pve-toplevel:
>  endif::manvolnum[]
>  
> -{pve} is based on the famous https://www.debian.org/[Debian] Linux
> -distribution. That means that you have access to the whole world of
> -Debian packages, and the base system is well documented. The
> +The following sections will focus on common virtualization tasks and explain the
> +{pve} specifics regarding the administration and management of the host machine.
> +
> +{pve} is based on https://www.debian.org/[Debian] GNU/Linux with additional
maybe [Debian GNU/Linux] is better
> +repositories to provides the {pve} related packages. This means that the full
s/to provides/for
> +range of Debian packages is available as well as security updates and bug fixes.
s/as well as/including
> +{pve} provides it's own Linux kernel based on the Ubuntu kernel. It has all the
> +necessary virtualization and container featues enabled and includes
s/featues/features
> +https://zfsonlinux.org[ZFS] and serveral extra hardware drivers.
s/serveral/several
> +
> +For other topics not included in the following sections, please refer to the
> +Debian documentation. The
>  https://debian-handbook.info/download/stable/debian-handbook.pdf[Debian
> -Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online, and provides a
> -comprehensive introduction to the Debian operating system (see
> -xref:Hertzog13[]).
> -
> -A standard {pve} installation uses the default repositories from
> -Debian, so you get bug fixes and security updates through that
> -channel. In addition, we provide our own package repository to roll
> -out all {pve} related packages. This includes updates to some
> -Debian packages when necessary.
> -
> -We also deliver a specially optimized Linux kernel, where we enable all
> -required virtualization and container features. That kernel includes
> -drivers for http://zfsonlinux.org/[ZFS], and several hardware drivers.
> -For example, we ship Intel network card drivers to support their
> -newest hardware.
> -
> -The following sections will concentrate on virtualization related
> -topics. They either explain things which are different on {pve}, or
> -tasks which are commonly used on {pve}. For other topics, please refer
> -to the standard Debian documentation.
> -
> +Administrator\'s Handbook] is available online, and provides a comprehensive
> +introduction to the Debian operating system (see xref:Hertzog13[]).
>  
>  ifdef::wiki[]
>  
> @@ -38,7 +28,7 @@ See Also
>  
>  * link:/wiki/Package_Repositories[Package Repositories]
>  
> -* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration] 
> +* link:/wiki/Network_Configuration[Network Configuration]
>  
>  * link:/wiki/System_Software_Updates[System Software Updates]
>  
> -- 
> 2.20.1
> 
> 
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