[pbs-devel] applied: [PATCH pbs-docs] introduction: language improvement (fix typos, grammar, wording)

[Wolfgang Bumiller]

applied

On Wed, Jul 29, 2020 at 12:20:48PM +0200, Dylan Whyte wrote:
> Fix typos and grammatical errors.
> Reword some sentences for better readability.
> Clean up the list found under "Software Stack", so that it maintains a consistent
> style throughout.
> ---
>  docs/introduction.rst | 44 +++++++++++++++++++++----------------------
>  1 file changed, 22 insertions(+), 22 deletions(-)
> 
> diff --git a/docs/introduction.rst b/docs/introduction.rst
> index cca8109b..9df0762f 100644
> --- a/docs/introduction.rst
> +++ b/docs/introduction.rst
> @@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ encryption (AE_). Using :term:`Rust` as the implementation language guarantees h
>  performance, low resource usage, and a safe, high-quality codebase.
>  
>  It features strong client-side encryption. Thus, it's possible to
> -backup data to not fully trusted targets.
> +backup data to targets that are not fully trusted.
>  
>  
>  Architecture
> @@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ Architecture
>  
>  Proxmox Backup Server uses a `client-server model`_. The server stores the
>  backup data and provides an API to create backups and restore data. With the
> -API it's also possible to manage disks and other server side resources.
> +API, it's also possible to manage disks and other server-side resources.
>  
>  The backup client uses this API to access the backed up data. With the command
>  line tool ``proxmox-backup-client`` you can create backups and restore data.
> @@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ For QEMU_ with `Proxmox Virtual Environment`_ we deliver an integrated client.
>  A single backup is allowed to contain several archives. For example, when you
>  backup a :term:`virtual machine`, each disk is stored as a separate archive
>  inside that backup. The VM configuration itself is stored as an extra file.
> -This way, it is easy to access and restore only important parts of the backup
> +This way, it's easy to access and restore only important parts of the backup,
>  without the need to scan the whole backup.
>  
>  
> @@ -44,29 +44,29 @@ Main Features
>     :term:`container`\ s.
>  
>  :Performance: The whole software stack is written in :term:`Rust`,
> -   to provide high speed and memory efficiency.
> +   in order to provide high speed and memory efficiency.
>  
>  :Deduplication: Periodic backups produce large amounts of duplicate
> -   data. The deduplication layer avoids redundancy and minimizes the used
> -   storage space.
> +   data. The deduplication layer avoids redundancy and minimizes the storage
> +   space used.
>  
>  :Incremental backups: Changes between backups are typically low. Reading and
> -   sending only the delta reduces storage and network impact of backups.
> +   sending only the delta reduces the storage and network impact of backups.
>  
> -:Data Integrity: The built-in `SHA-256`_ checksum algorithm assures the
> -   accuracy and consistency of your backups.
> +:Data Integrity: The built-in `SHA-256`_ checksum algorithm ensures accuracy and
> +   consistency in your backups.
>  
>  :Remote Sync: It is possible to efficiently synchronize data to remote
>     sites. Only deltas containing new data are transferred.
>  
> -:Compression: The ultra fast Zstandard_ compression is able to compress
> +:Compression: The ultra-fast Zstandard_ compression is able to compress
>     several gigabytes of data per second.
>  
> -:Encryption: Backups can be encrypted on the client-side using AES-256 in
> +:Encryption: Backups can be encrypted on the client-side, using AES-256 in
>     Galois/Counter Mode (GCM_) mode. This authenticated encryption (AE_) mode
>     provides very high performance on modern hardware.
>  
> -:Web interface: Manage the Proxmox Backup Server with the integrated web-based
> +:Web interface: Manage the Proxmox Backup Server with the integrated, web-based
>     user interface.
>  
>  :Open Source: No secrets. Proxmox Backup Server is free and open-source
> @@ -80,11 +80,11 @@ Reasons for Data Backup?
>  ------------------------
>  
>  The main purpose of a backup is to protect against data loss. Data loss can be
> -caused by faulty hardware but also by human error.
> +caused by both faulty hardware and human error.
>  
>  A common mistake is to accidentally delete a file or folder which is still
> -required. Virtualization can even amplify this problem; it easily happens that
> -a whole virtual machine is deleted by just pressing a single button.
> +required. Virtualization can even amplify this problem, as deleting a whole
> +virtual machine can be as easy as pressing a single button.
>  
>  For administrators, backups can serve as a useful toolkit for temporarily
>  storing data. For example, it is common practice to perform full backups before
> @@ -104,16 +104,16 @@ Software Stack
>  
>  Proxmox Backup Server consists of multiple components:
>  
> -* server-daemon providing, among others, a RESTfull API, super-fast
> +* A server-daemon providing, among other things, a RESTfull API, super-fast
>    asynchronous tasks, lightweight usage statistic collection, scheduling
>    events, strict separation of privileged and unprivileged execution
> -  environments, ...
> -* JavaScript management webinterface
> -* management CLI tool for the server (`proxmox-backup-manager`)
> -* client CLI tool (`proxmox-backup-client`) to access the server easily from
> -  any `Linux amd64` environment.
> +  environments
> +* A JavaScript management web interface
> +* A management CLI tool for the server (`proxmox-backup-manager`)
> +* A client CLI tool (`proxmox-backup-client`) to access the server easily from
> +  any `Linux amd64` environment
>  
> -Everything outside of the web interface is written in the Rust programming
> +Aside from the web interface, everything is written in the Rust programming
>  language.
>  
>   "The Rust programming language helps you write faster, more reliable software.
> -- 
> 2.20.1